the animation was nice, but
There's a very distinct lack of sound effects and music.
Also, on more than a couple occasions it's hard to tell what's going on. I'd suggest storyboarding and keyframe planning before you do your next project to create a more fluid piece.
Agreeing with the person below me...
Your animation could use a lot more sound effects. In addition, a lot of your audio balancing is terrible. Some voices are a lot louder than others, some are too quiet. You should try adjusting them in a music editing software. I recommend Audacity.
The plot is a little dry, also. Why are they fighting? Why are they there? What are their names? What's their goal? Why is there only one dude? Why is that one chick part dragon? Why does that guy have a laptop, and why do none of the chicks know what he's doing? Needs more depth.
The animation could use some brushing up, too. Everything kinda looks sketchy and unclean and not...solid... if that makes any sense. In addition, the characters could use a broader range of expression. For the majority, everyone kinda looked like this: 0 _0
Overall, not bad. But not great, either. Hopefully you take some of this advice with your next production. I look forward to any further improvements. :D
-More sound effects? Yes, I know.
-Terrible audio balance? I disagree. I adjusted everything to fit my standards in Garageband, Audacity, AND Flash. It may need improvement but its not really bad.
-Plot? Yes, its a bit confusing but you have to actually look beyond this one animation (it's a series!) to answer some of your questions. :)
I loved the voice acting and the dialogue. It was pretty hilarious.
The characters could stand to have a little more definition aesthetically, but other than that everything was pretty nice. Very smooth animation.
A touching tale about how furries are created
All kidding aside...
Pretty good animation. The backgrounds could've used a bit of work, though. Also, the entire set-up and ending was kinda predictable. A little better than average, so I'll give it a 6/10.
I mean, the animation was good
But the story itself was very... meh.
I like your characters and the flow of the animation, but the scenario bothered me and doesn't really make a ton of sense.
One other thing that kind of bugged me... when she bent down, her underwear was white, but when she took her clothes off they were black.
Not bad, but not great.
Great art, terrible jokes
It's a shame to waste such good animation and detailed drawings on such shit humor. I can honestly say I watched this /entire/ thing and didn't crack a smile. Not once. Get your humor somewhere other than being "random", plox.
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